editing our story

Here is our edited story.

Things we learnt about were

We aren’t allowed to use then, and, also and because at the beginning of a sentence.

Speech marks go on the OUTSIDE of the full stop or other punctuation.

The end of a sentence can be marked by a full stop, an exclamation mark or a question mark. You don’t need to put an extra full stop after a question mark.

Remember to check ALL capital letters. Sometimes we need to put them in and sometimes we need to take them out.

On Monday 24th September 2018 Room 7 did a blindfold challenge. We wanted to have fun and make our morning a bit interesting by playing a game. 

Firstly Miss Ashley told us the rules which was “no touching the tables or pieces of paper on the floor or you will lose points.“  However you are allowed to touch the chairs because you sometimes have to step over them to get to the end. Next we got into buddies. My buddy was Lucina.  We had to line up by the heater in our buddies. 

First it was my turn to go so Lucina (my buddy)  put the blindfold on me (over my eyes) and helped me to stand up. The blindfold was tight it felt like a constrictor boa on my face. I felt so confused and disorientated because the blindfold was covering my eyes. Lucina told me to “go left, right, straight and step over.” I was feeling nervous and a little bit scared because “what if she was tricking me?“ and I was really doing something silly. I got to the end safely and took my blindfold off.

Next it was my buddies turn so I helped her put the blindfold on. I told her to walk straight first, then next turn left. She doesn’t know her lefts and rights so she went the wrong way.I said “no your other left” and it was a little bit funny. In the end we got to the blue fruit tray and we made it without losing any points!

I think I would like to do this activity again because it was cool to do something different and fun in class especially since it’s the end of the term and I think we are all feeling kind of tired.

Focuses for writing this week	Explanation in my own words.
Where do speech marks go	Before and after
How to put in other punctuation	Before the speech marks
When to start a new line or when to keep writing	Under the dialog
Different words for ‘said’	Respond,said,respond politely,yield,gasped,
Adding adverbs

EXAMPLES

“Who can I pick on?” asked Miss Ashley.

“Me” replied Timote.

“How was your day?” asked Hope.

“Great, thank you” replied Miss Ashley.

“How was your weekend” asked Dwyane.

“It was good” responded Havea.

If more than one person is talking, you put the reply underneath.

Mary was a beautiful girl who was wearing her long black hair in two plaits. She asked her mum, “can I go to the pools today?”.

“Why do you want to go” mum replied.

“It’s hot and I want to cool off”.

“Fine then”

If it’s only one person, you keep going.

Little red riding hood walked along the dirt path and thought to herself “I’m getting hungry”. She had walked a looooonng way but the thought of warm apple pie when she got to grandma’s house kept her going.

MY GROUP’S EXAMPLE.

“Do u like chickens?” asked stanley as he drank his tea .

“Yes I do I eat them” Responded Havea.

“No it’s not healthy for you” said  Keru as he ate a cake .

“Oh ok is vegetables healthy “ yelled stanley.

“Yes is that a stupid question” Havea said politely.

“Of Course it’s healthy” said Keru.

“Do you play Fortnite?” Havea Said.

“Change subject” As Stanley rolled his eyes.

“I play it on my ipad 2” replied keru.

“What is your username?” Stanley asked.

“Keruazap that’s my username” said keru.

“Mine is XxCortezzJadenxX” as Havea Drank tea.``

“Mine is STANFACE034”replied Stanley.

“Did u know that there is a new game it’s called battlelands” replied keru

“ That must be cool” Havea said with an Exciting Face

Fairytale introductions

Once upon a time
One sunny day
One beautiful bright sunny day
One marvelous day
One horrible rainy day
One sad dreary day



In a faraway land
In the deepest ocean
In the darkest prison
Far far away
In a dark forest
In a vast desert
In a creepy dungeon
In the scary woods
In a haunted house
In a movie set
In a creepy maze
In a wonderful school
In a small town


There was
A beautiful girl
An old man
Royal family
A wise girl
A handsome man
A traveller
A scary monster
A butler
Guards
Handsome prince
beautiful queen
Creepy clown
Young princess
Royal king
Famous celebrity
A gangster bodyguard
A music producer
A sad servant
A sneaky thief
Who was Lost
Enormously rich
Poor
Diva
Who lived in a cottage
Who had 6 sons and 6 daughters
Had a glass eyeball
Had a ginormous family
Lived in las vegas
Who had robotic legs
Who was a marvellous actor
Who only ever had onions
Who was a robber
Who lived on the streets
Part time DJ part time spy
Who had only leg
Who was a murderer
Who was a huge nerd
Who had one fat eye
Once upon a time in small cottage there was a man named jack who was poor .he was a poor man with only a bed with a couple  of  food to eat .but one day when he was hiking in the morning he found a  old paper with a map on it ,,,,,, to be continued.

The reasons why the astronauts are chosen to go on a planet because the leader of N.S.A chooses 4 people that get to go on planets. But they also would just pretty much die from the dust,the wind and finally the storm and other alemintal things in mars.

KERU

RM 7 bean boozled challenge

RM 7 bean boozled

Who? Room 7.

What? We played  bean boozled.

When? Thursday 12 april.

Where? At school in room 7.

Why? Cause mrs komor gave miss ashley the bean boozled  game.

Round 1:

One morning on thursday 12th April we did a challenge and it was called  bean boozled challenge. Miss Ashley was given the game by Mrs Komor for christmas. All of  Rm7 got to try some Rm7 got bad luck and most of Room 7 got good luck. Then miss ashley picked  us to come. Pick one so first was Keru they thought it was lime but when he swallowed .it was actually grass. Next was lopi he got white

bean.and when he ate it he got spoiled  milk. the next one was michael and he had  grass last was miss Ashley and she got grass like michael .

Round 2:

Then it was the next round  and again i started fist and lopi was next and we got the same one  he got stinky socks and again miss Ashley was last and this time she got  buttered popcorn and then we sat on the mat after we did the challenge.

DioXide- It means Oxygen

Vessels- It’s a Varios of boats.

Oxygen-is transparent and is from trees and makes us alive

Circulated-  It means a freely through a closed system or area.

Circulatory System-the system that circulates blood and lymph through the body, consisting of the heart, blood vessels, blood, lymph, and the lymphatic vessels and glands.

Circulatory- Circulatory means a circle of blood or sap.

Disposer- It is a Garbage Disposal

Recount checklist

Crossing the bridge

On Saturday the 16th of March 1852, there was a farmer and her brown and white cow. The farmer’s name was called peaches.

First the farmer got her cow and tried to get the cow to move “ come on bessie.” she said as she struggled to pull bessie. Peaches grabbed her coins and she went to William Johnsen the toll keeper. She gave William Johnson 1 coin for her and 1 for her cow.

“Evening Johnson” she said as she was waiting to cross the bridge.

                                                                                                                   

William Johnson took the money and said “thank you very much,enjoy your day.” William Johnson used his strength to turn the winch so that the farmer could go through the bridge and go to the market. The farmer and the cow got to the market and the farmer got the bucket and milked the cow to sell the milk to the villagers.

The farmer looked and looked to see if anyone was coming to get some milk. But then she saw one person in line to see if it tasted nice. So she gave the nice lady some milk and she said “ WOOPHE!!!, that's the best milk i've ever tasted.” So she bought some milk and took it to her kids and they shared the milk together. After she left she told everyone about the milk and there was a whole line of people waiting to get some milk. Then he got to the last person and there was no one else in the line. So she packed up all her stuff and took her cow home. Then they got home and they jumped straight on to their beds and went to sleep.

Recount checklist ✓✓✓✓✓✓✓
Surface features	Searched	Found	Fixed
Capital letters at the beginning of a sentence	✓	✓	✓
Capital ‘I’	✓	X	X
Capital letters for names of places and people	✓	✓	X
Full stops at the end of a sentence	✓	✓	X
Speech marks when people are talking	✓	✓	X
Punctuation - ? ! ; : ‘	✓	✓	x
Words are written in past tense	✓	✓	✓
Connectives - next, then, afterwards	✓	✓	X
Interesting and difficult adjectives	✓	✓	X
Deep features
Introduction has who, what, when, where, why, and how	✓	✓
Conclusion has a reflective statement or says how you felt	✓	✓	x
Ideas/events in the right order	✓	✓
3 paragraphs	✓	✓	X
Metaphors and similes	X	X	X
Different types of sentences - short, long, compound and complex	✓	✓	X